Short Story
Its been awhile and so I thot I'd take a shot at writing one. I am definitely a li'l bit rusty and always looking to improve... So any feedback will be greatly appreciated.
She
I have known her for a few days now. I know she came to this profession only out of financial necessity. I still remember the first day I saw her. Timid, scared and not really sure what she was supposed to do as the stern-faced madam brought her to my room. But she had a natural talent and was a fast learner. There were a lot of other women doing what she did in this same building. But she’s said to be the best of them all now.
Every day with her felt like a brand new day and today was no different. Her hands were all over me as soon as she walked in. Her soft fingertips worked their magic over different parts of me and her long hair was smooth as silk as it brushed against my body. She was really skilled and knew exactly which of my buttons to press. I just lay quietly as she did what she was best at.
She spent the entire day, which passed by too quickly, with me. After she was done, the programmer pressed 4 more of my buttons – CTRL, ALT, DEL and K - to lock the computer, picked up her bag and left for the day.
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thinkers since May 11, 2005
18 Comments:
Good story!
The ending didn't live up to the build-up. U hv disappointed the front benchers.
Good idea, but u need to build it up a little ( & not necessarily front-bencher style too !!)
Too short to be a really good one , but the idea is entertaining !
Balaji, a real good short-story, like what you get at times in Kumudam.. I knew you didnt mean 'that' thing.. I was thinking of someone like a massage specialist or someone like that.. the end surprised me..
I got a doubt and dont know where to ask. Whats the difference between release date and censor date of a movie? I found this here:
http://www.cinesouth.com/films/thalattu%20kekudhamma.html
I would like to know which of these is the day the movie hit the theaters.
Thanks :)
Prabhu
I got a doubt and dont know where to ask. Whats the difference between release date and censor date of a movie? I found this here:
http://www.cinesouth.com/films/thalattu%20kekudhamma.html
I would like to know which of these is the day the movie hit the theaters.
Thanks :)
Prabhu
bj, a write-up of this length (actually slightly longer, if I'm right) is called a "sketch." so, with that issue out of the way, a few words on "She":
nicely written but it was obvious that the ending was going to be something 'cute' and not what someone (front or back bench, I dont care!) would normally expect...but compared to your beautifully written ending of "The Window," this was just an amusing gimmick...
the movie gets censored at the censor date and is released on the release date. Always, release date is after censor date.
Some people like Kamalhaasan get the movie censored even 15 days before the release, if they want to send the movie for awards and december is ending..
adadada... naan ennennamonu ninaichuputaen =P
LOL
Nice story! :D
short stories can actually be of any length. here's a nice guide to the diff. kinds of short stories. i guess mine would be flash fiction :-)
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Ha aha....nice...nice ending...Computers started telling stories..
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