Wednesday, July 20, 2005

Flash Fiction - 6

Brand New Day

All of them looked forward to the day. The businessman was in high spirits since he was going to hear about his promotion. The smartly dressed young man was confident about his big job interview. The girl checked her makeup once more as she wondered if her longtime internet chat friend, who she was going to meet for the first time, would be the one. The woman touched her belly with a smile on her lips as she imagined the moment she would see her baby on the ultrasound. Their anticipations and hopes were evident in their nods and smiles at each other whenever their eyes met. They began the day together as they boarded the train. And ended their lives together as the bomb ripped through it.

21 Comments:

At 1:10 AM, Anonymous F e r r a r i said...

Very touching!!!
Truth is bitter :-(

 
At 1:47 AM, Blogger skanda said...

very true and touching...

 
At 2:58 AM, Blogger Nithya Swaminathan said...

Oh God!!! Gory:(

 
At 5:59 AM, Blogger bhuvan said...

Uh...

 
At 7:36 AM, Blogger Ram.C said...

that's a sad twist at the end....

 
At 8:30 AM, Blogger kaleidoscope said...

OMG, me dont like sad endings.

 
At 8:50 AM, Anonymous rekhs said...

Right after karthikutty recovering u shd write some thing less morbid balaji!
:(
sad but i guess life sometimes is.
ask me!!!:(
recently in U.K. my daughter was in bet two blasts and walked 20 mins cos all passengers were asked to get down fm the train since delib elec failure,as a safety measure, and on her way back she walked for two hours to reach home
:(didnt have enuf money and an indian (stranger) lent her money,
thank god she is safe and sound.
I told myself mayb my mom watched over her:)

 
At 9:38 AM, Blogger Balaji said...

ferrari, sure is :(

kals, me neither! but this story just refused to go away after i read about those tragic london blasts... will make it up in the next one :)

rekhs, as i said, this one was gnawing at me since i read about the blasts. so i had to get it out of the system! glad your daughter is OK.

 
At 9:49 AM, Blogger Vijay Ramamurthi said...

good one, sad but tru :(

 
At 9:57 AM, Blogger Cipher said...

Very nice and touching

 
At 10:33 AM, Blogger packer said...

Good one, though sad ending but realistic.

 
At 10:36 AM, Anonymous ram said...

the twist at the end was shocking...very well-written, BB...

 
At 11:37 AM, Blogger sen said...

short and perfect.well written one.

 
At 12:53 PM, Blogger tt_giant said...

Nice one.

Value of life is the same everywhere. What has happened in London happens multiple times, every single day in Iraq.

When I went to Cape canaveral (NASA), I saw some clips of the earth from space. It looked so peaceful.

 
At 1:06 PM, Blogger Balaji said...

vijayr, thanx!

cipher, thanx!

packer, thanx!

ram, thanx! hope this had more of an impact

senthil, thanx!

ttg, very true and an echo of my sentiments. and thats the reason why though this story had its birth after the London blasts, I didnt mention a specific geographical location in the story.

 
At 1:34 PM, Anonymous ram said...

yep, it did...i am not a big fan of flash fiction coz to me, its a very evanescent reading experience...but this one shook me up a bit...very well-done.

 
At 2:04 PM, Blogger Adaengappa !! said...

Life is nothing but a Dream..

Am moved !!

 
At 8:21 AM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

You can tell this story is not set in London.. as no one "nods and smiles at each other whenever their eyes met(meet)" on the tube! You'd be lucky if they looked UP from the paper/book/magazine they so intently read in the mornings!

 
At 11:18 AM, Blogger Balaji said...

ram, thanx... considering your usual frank opinions, this is high praise :)

adengappa, thanx!

anon, i guess thats why writers do so much research about the place they set their story in! i plead ignorance :)

 
At 1:11 PM, Anonymous ram said...

what can i say :) !

 
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